First off, let me thank everyone for their advice. I may not have won the contest, but the lessons I’ve learned in the process have been nothing short of inspiring. That said, I’ve come up with two new single sentence doozies. The first is my response to the “What’s your book about?” question, and the second is my new and improved logline. Hope you like!
The Dead Don’t Cry is about a ten year old girl who gets caught in the middle of an interplanetary crisis, and how she and her family come together to save two planets from the wrath of one man.
When a ten year old girl gets caught in the middle of an interplanetary crisis, it’s up to her to unite the two worlds before one man can destroy them all.
I wanted to incorporate key words like ‘wet-born’ and ‘Old Earth,’ but I don’t think the required brevity permits it. So, what do you think?
Hi, everyone, hope you’re enjoying this beautiful weekend (if you’re in North Jersey)! I finally got around to writing a one sentence answer to the dreaded question, “What’s your book about?” thanks to this terrific contest. I’m broadcasting it for some input.
“Worlds collide when an extraordinary girl determined to save her father wanders into an ancient wilderness embroiled in a life or death struggle against a legacy of tyranny.”
Do you like it? Is it too wordy, not wordy enough? Writing these are terribly difficult, so every bit of feedback helps!